Word count: 138
Warnings: Death, and mentions of sex.
Critique type: Grammar, and style.
Other: I have a question should I leave the tense as is or should I change it to past?
As a monk he was never supposed to lust. Yet he lusted after money, and women. Then he met her, the taij-ya. As with other women he lusted after her, but this was different. He actually felling for her, and she too reciprocated those feeling. Several months had passed and they became engaged. Then one night they acted on their lustful, carnal desires. This would eventually bring their downfall. Several weeks later the taiji-ya had learned she was with child. The next nine moths had passed quickly, they had settled down and she had birthed as son. Then one evening the monks curse had spread and it consumed him. His last words to the taiji-ya were said to be "I hope we meet again, my love." Overcome with grief the taiji-ya had slain herself, leaving only her son.